My Documentary Work In Progress

Please go to https:/vimeo.com/57937802 and review my first draft of a video submission to the American Brain Fdn. for their Lets Cure Brain Disease contest. I also intend to adjust it to add to my submission to this Fdn's SHARK TANK III contest. 
Please go to        https:/vimeo.com/57937802

and review the first cut for a short for the Brain Disease Foundation contest and I would appreciate your thoughts on ;
1. Emotional feelings through the progression of the piece
2. Questions left un-answered.
3. Background music selections.
4. Hard cuts vs. fades vs. soft through the piece.
5. The order of the subjects
6. Anything Else